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breathe.
eat some ice cream.
look up and count the clouds.

breathe.
close your eyes against the sun.
see the black swimming against your eyelids before--

breathe.
it's funny how quiet things are in your mind.
the world, there's too much.

breathe.
noise.
it's too harsh and bright. not now.

breathe.
ouch. your legs have gone numb.
how long have you been here?

breathe.
if you stopped moving long enough
will the world stop?

breathe?
(yes, breathe.
don't stop; that's good.)

breathe.
the word breathe sounds funny here.
it sounds light and passing and trivial.

breathe.
it doesn't sound like it will last.
not forever, anyways.

breathe.
how long will yours last?
long enough to make more people smile, you hope.

breathe.
you feel the sun warming the grass.
it's time to wake up.



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to be honest, i don't even know what i just wrote.
just some random thoughts and feelings floating around in me that i had to write down.
i just had to pen it down even if it doesn't just quite make sense, you know that feel? 

comment your thoughts on this piece below, pretty please? :) 


i really, really want to hear what you think of it!

♥♥♥

27 comments

  1. OH MY BLITZKIREG. This is incredible! Your poems always evoke this peaceful kind of nostalgia, or warmth - like a campfire after a long, hard day. That was me trying to be poetic in response to your poem. Pathetic, I know. :) Love the structure!

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    1. that was anything but pathetic, jo<3<3 UGH thank you for your comment, it made me feel so happy. no worries about misspelling blitzkrieg; i didn't even know that word existed until i saw your comment ;) xxx

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  2. This is so lovely and amazing! <3
    I agree with Jo, the structure was nice.

    xx
    Emily

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  3. it was an utterly perfect way to reflect on life ❤

    ~Arielle

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    1. i find reflections on life so necessary for growth as a person. many things i wouldn't have seen if i didn't reflect on it (:

      thank you so much, arielle. <3

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  4. My goodness! :) This is wonderful!
    ~ Sanjana
    peridotcove.blogspot.com

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    1. *grins* good grief, you're too kind <3<3 thanks xx

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  5. the structure is everything
    i still feel like i'm not sure what the general setting or whatever is
    but it makes me feel so much that i don't care
    everything's just so good. (can you imagine those last two words in italics please)
    i loved it so much and your vocabulary is so on point wow.

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    1. eyyyy that was a lovely breakdown of the whole thing!! i like <3
      (italics imagined as requested 😌)

      thank you kindly, dear olivia xx

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  6. no words at all.

    and that's always what your words do to me. they leave me breathless. ♥ fab job, darling.

    xx

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    1. smiling so hard right now because you are too cool and precious <3<3
      thanks so muchly, addy xxx

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  7. I know that feeling.
    I love this <3

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    1. i'm glad you know that feel and could relate. i love it when others can feel it as well <3
      thank you lauren!! xx

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  8. I love how you reflected the simple things. <3

    xoxo Morning

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    1. the simple things are often the ones we miss out and forget, aren't they? they deserve their own posts sometimes ;) THANK YOU<3<3

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  9. Ohhhhhhhhhhh zis is soooo gooooooood!

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    1. eeeeeeeek you <3<3 thank you kindly, m'am (: xxx

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  10. It transported me, Elisa, and I think that's what writing is supposed to do. It took me to a beautiful place of tranquility. It was a familiar place, even though I'm not able to visit there often. Nostalgia and peace and exquisite sorrow all at once, rushing over me, bathing me in their presence.

    I doubt I'm making sense. So I'll stop.

    -T. x

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    1. aw stop, it makes a ton of sense to me, tane<3<3 :)) you caught the essence of this piece and gave it to me (because i as a writer, ironically, didn't even know exactly what this was about hehe).

      thank you thank you xxx

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    1. pshhhh you're too kind ❤ THANK YOU(:

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  12. " eat some ice cream.
    look up and count the clouds "

    Yeah, girl! Sometimes we are to uptight and busy to calm down, relax, and maybe take a little time to "Treat yo self" !

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    1. i love that!! too often we forget to relax heh, thanks for commenting dear ♡♡

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  13. Oh man. this is beyond better <3 breathing is the most beautiful thing in the world if you think about it.

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    1. AUTUMN *sobs* thank you, you really made my day *hugs*
      it is a really beautiful thing ♡

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